tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post1675965899359079341..comments2024-03-28T13:06:29.793+00:00Comments on conradwalks: Trouble with our planetSir Hughhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17908756392825206914noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-35403635654835945592020-02-21T07:57:32.214+00:002020-02-21T07:57:32.214+00:00You'll notice that the allusions all come from...You'll notice that the allusions all come from a sonnet (actually a Shakespearean sonnet, there are variants). Fourteen lines governed by tight rules: ABAB CDCD EFEF, ending with a rhyming couplet. If you are looking for your work to be quoted in three-hundred years, as with this author, disciplined formats may be the way to go. They are not necessarily the enemy of emotion:<br /><br /><b>Diane: in hospital and later</b><br /><br /><i>I would not have you prone, my dear, but up<br />And wiping plates, sharp-tongued, close at my side,<br />A kitchen critic, keen to laugh and slap<br />My washing-up techniques with woe betide.</i>Roderick Robinsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16828395545197001637noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-26957697965568840882020-02-21T07:30:12.798+00:002020-02-21T07:30:12.798+00:00afoot - that sounds interesting. I enjoy science a...afoot - that sounds interesting. I enjoy science and take an interest but tend to struggle when it comes to the quantum theoryf when they are talking about stuff nobody can see. As for more poetry I am waiting for new inspiration - perhaps I could write one about not understanding quantum theory?Sir Hughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17908756392825206914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-7137788371524614872020-02-20T16:36:05.824+00:002020-02-20T16:36:05.824+00:00Excellent Conrad. I failed to read your post thoro...Excellent Conrad. I failed to read your post thoroughly enough and thought you had selected poems from the anthology! I’m currently reading a different kind of poetry - Sean Carroll’s (Theoretical Physicist) “Something Deeply Hidden” - Quantum Worlds and the Emergence of Spacetime. The main title is part of a quote from Einstein. So far it’s living up to the reviews, so worth a read even if physics is not your thing - though it helps. Meantime more of your poetry please.afootinthehillshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06670636358354420373noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-13273781884360977932020-02-19T12:22:52.786+00:002020-02-19T12:22:52.786+00:00BC - Touché!BC - Touché!Sir Hughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17908756392825206914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-29574101862064401502020-02-19T12:20:38.927+00:002020-02-19T12:20:38.927+00:00"...And summer’s lease hath all too short a d..."...And summer’s lease hath all too short a date"bowlandclimberhttp://bowlandclimber.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-69135257045921793312020-02-19T11:22:11.985+00:002020-02-19T11:22:11.985+00:00Alan R - Thanks for the suggestion. For me I don&#...Alan R - Thanks for the suggestion. For me I don't want my readers to feel they are trying to solve The Times crossword. My aim is to convey a sharp picture or atmosphere or point of view by hopefully skilful use of words clear enough for the reader to get the drift and at the same time be surprised or jolted perhaps into some interpretation that they hadn't previously considered. I have had alook at haikus and I wouldn't discount trying, but with all things artistic I find I can't start without a strong feeling for the subject and I therefore will have to wait until some strong idea jumps out at me.<br /><br />-------------------------<br /><br />BC - With the current weather we may have to wait for that outing until:<br /><br />"Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May,..."Sir Hughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17908756392825206914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-26637579907868528682020-02-19T10:28:03.563+00:002020-02-19T10:28:03.563+00:00Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day?
As I have ...Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day?<br />As I have knowledge of your physical wanderings at Cockerham your poem is quite evocative. The same goes for the Yorkshire wanderings. <br />Well done - I knew something would come out of your book club, do they know they have a budding Bard? <br />With regard to your comment on reading out aloud, I expect an ongoing commentary in verse on our next trip out. bowlandclimberhttp://bowlandclimber.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-70438854004016952732020-02-19T09:52:14.872+00:002020-02-19T09:52:14.872+00:00Well I must say that your poetry is great to read....Well I must say that your poetry is great to read. Well done. Have a go at writing a Haiku and lets see if we the readers can grasp what it means. Well done Conrad and keep it up.AlanRhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07180571503542781921noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-33246648330766418342020-02-19T09:03:34.519+00:002020-02-19T09:03:34.519+00:00gimmer - thanks for that. The lonely single commen...gimmer - thanks for that. The lonely single comment!<br /><br />I know there are jagged sections but if one reads aloud placing emphasis appropriately a lot of that can be ironed out- after all this is the cop-out of Free Verse and whilst one tries to keep a rhythm and momentum it doesn't lend itself as easily as does adherence to a formula, but that for me at least would introduce more difficulty and for the moment I prefer to mess about like this and surprise myself with tricks and word usage that one wouldn't think of using in prose*. I think poetry should be read aloud to clarify devices that would not be used in normal speech and/or reading. Because everything is compressed certain words or groups need a different inflection to bring out more the meaning.<br /><br />* One example is where I tagged on "A car." at the end of a line which I know does jar, but it expresses the fact that this was an unwelcome interruption to my progress and if read aloud with strong emphasis I think my intention would be more obvious.Sir Hughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17908756392825206914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-23321437651246137242020-02-18T20:19:25.189+00:002020-02-18T20:19:25.189+00:00 - actually, on second reading, very good : far be... - actually, on second reading, very good : far better than the stuff one sees on the tube, although they are limited to four or at most six very short lines, almost ko-ans - you really do capture the essence not only the physical but the metaphysical also - which is and has been the duty of the poet down the ages. <br />of course there are lines and constructions which jolt and jar a bit, but if these really are your first efforts, take a bow.gimmernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1365582190126322848.post-18363263700393834912020-02-18T12:25:38.125+00:002020-02-18T12:25:38.125+00:00Better than many one reads in those seductive '...Better than many one reads in those seductive 'slim volumes' on the shallow shelves of dark inviting booksellers ! <br />Keep it going <br />gimmernoreply@blogger.com