Tuesday 17th October 2023
I have rewritten my effort from the previous post:Mankind’s ascendancy achieves the moon walk and the atom split.
I too have that inborn urge, but less ambitious mine.
An unexplored tarn, nearer home than moon.
Those sapient genes dictate. I must explore.
Impasse: bramble, chest high reed and blocking trees,
No tarn to see.
Those genes accept but take control
Compelling further search beyond.
Distant, a stag lonely in the landscape .
He ambles as if in thought, to the field end and gate.
He stops. At three field's distance I hear him think.
Time pauses. He shuffles back . His haunches gently lower.
As if weightless he floats over the defenceless gate .
The gate now lifeless and insignificant below.
I watch him on his thoughtful way, five minutes or so,
And wonder what innate impulse drives HIM on his way?
We humans, (and perhaps my stag,) aspire for knowledge,
And by chance, along the way receive gratuitous rewards.
I like it, a lot. I would like to read what your example of a Haiku would be. I bet it would be challenging.
ReplyDeleteThanks Alan. I have looked at haiku before. I am not a student of poetry just an occasional dabbler. Whilst poetry in general compresses the content while hopefully keeping a mellifluous flow of language for me the haiku seems to take that a step too far. I suppose that is an admission of my lack of academia. or the lack of will and hard work required to study more deeply. This is the best I can do off the top my head. There are supposed to be 5/7/5 syllables and some connection with nature. I think I need to take some lessons in syllable counting.
ReplyDeleteHaiku studied
Not much found there
Leafless tree
Hi Conrad, very quick and very good. I like this one too, The old train station, Only from the swallows nest, Arrivals and departures.
ReplyDeleteKeep it up Conrad that is a good start.
Ps, lack of academia my foot,.
ReplyDeleteAlan R - I presume you are "Anonymous.."
ReplyDeleteVery good. Is that one of yours?
Yes. Sorry about that. Depending on which device I use to comment, depends if I comment as AlanR as default or not. Crazy. The Haiku isn’t mine unfortunately but for anyone wishing to have a go, it is a fine example. Here is one my daughter wrote whilst in Japan.
DeleteWalk through park of peace. Bombed remains reminding us. Grief for those that died. A good first attempt I thought.
I seem to have set everybody off into poetry - See Eunice's latest comment on my Bruno post.
ReplyDeleteBC - I seem to have a little burst every now and then. I do quite often dip into the best anthology I have found: Staying Alive edited by Neil Astley - here is a snippet from when I posted before about it:
ReplyDelete"If anybody out there has any inclination whatsoever to look at poetry I would recommend this volume because it has a huge eclectic range and also it is divided into interesting vaguely related subjects which provides an opportunity to read contrasting views on a particular theme."
Yes I bought one of the Staying Alive anthologies on your recommendation.
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